Haiku

I'm trying a new (for me) American form of haiku (suggested by Kai) that has more structure than the Western version that rejects the 5-7-5 structure. This form aims at a 3-4-3 structure to more closely approximate the sparseness of the original Japanese forms.

So here are a couple of feeble first attempts.

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quiet moon
song-dog howls --
desert night



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red-tail hawk
circles overhead --
soft prayer